Fiction by willrite

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The air was crisp with autumn, and a scattering of bright yellow maples leaves skittered across the walk as Leonid Barzneshki walked briskly from the entrance of the Cabriole Hotel toward the waiting ink black limousine pulled into the entryway drive only a few footsteps from the door. The distance was only slightly more than usual today because of a strategically placed van that had just delivered a load of patrons from Barajas airport, Madrid’s international flight destination.

As was his usual practice, Leonid Barzneshki varied the cadence of his walk, and added an exaggerated weave into the uneven steps as well. It was a maneuver that had served him well in army during his time as Commander of Polish forces in Iraq, and actually saved his life on two separate occasions. No sniper could possibly anticipate any of the random movements. Most snipers anyway.

Leonid had almost reached the limousine, it’s waiting door already ajar as an aide prepared to open it fully, when the spatter of a bloodied projectile slammed into the window of the limousine with a loud spattering smack, and a heartbeat later Leonid Barzneshki stumbled, regained his footing momentarily, then sagged to the ground. The assassin had found their mark, and Leonid Barzneski lay crumpled on the cold slab of the concrete parking ramp.

by willrite
ABOUT THE AUTHOR
Willrite joined fictionthis on Wednesday 20th of August 2008. This talented author is an active member of the site, has submitted 1 fiction(s) thus far and voted for 3. Show some love and leave your comments and feedback below their fictions.

I really like it 'Willrite', almost sounds like a Tom Clancy. The 'exaggerated weave into the uneven steps' made me think of someone walking in a really funny way, so it kinda made me laugh, was that intentional? Good work mate, I would love to read more.
Its nice, a little forced or contrived at points, let the reader figure it out for themselves
Willrite i have to be honest with you i really would want this for a start of the book. Its just so bloody intriguing. I love it!

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